Tuesday, January 10, 2006

Exasperation

It's winter, but the streets are singing.
Vision is burning
My mind is ringing

It's winter, but lights are flying.
Nerves are fraying
My patience is trying

It's winter, but life is feeding.
fingers turn pages
memories are stampeding

Looking up through the ice.
Running through empty streets.
Piercing the stillness.
Scrambled.

7 Comments:

Blogger GEL said...

The momentum of your piece, highlighted by rhyme and the repetition of "It's winter, but", reiterates the feeling of being on a life carousel needing to tend toresponsibility despite the other aspects of winter that beckon.

Do you live in an area hit particularly hard recently by the winter weather? Even if that's not the case, this is very catchy.

I like your strong verb usage such as "vision is burning", "my mind is ringing" and entire phrases" "but life is feeding" and "memories are stampeding."

2:55 AM  
Blogger bert moth said...

**silvermOOn** - I jotted this down during a sleepless night - thinking about big decisions and change on the horizon. We haven't been hit hard by winter in Boston...yet. I take it winters are somewhat mild in the Emerald City?

10:22 PM  
Blogger Lorena said...

you've definitely captured the title so well. i like especially:
" but life is feeding.
fingers turn pages
memories are stampeding"

great photograph as well.

12:34 AM  
Blogger Cocaine Jesus said...

a lovely circus ride of a poem. we don't get winters like this over here. wish we did.

8:26 AM  
Blogger bert moth said...

lorena: Thank you. I like the photograph as well. I don't think I graced it with words as well as I should have, but it had it's place in time.

cocaine jesus - That's funny. I thought you did. Get winters like that, that is. I know they don't in Ireland, but never been to England. That is your place of residence, right?

3:13 PM  
Blogger GEL said...

I've lived in Boston and still remember the cold!!(When I wrote the comment I wasn't sure if you only go to school there and might have been elsewhere on Winter Break.

You're right; it's usually warmer "Over the Rainbow" but it can be just as cold as Boston.

12:12 PM  
Blogger GEL said...

I meant to add that you definitely captured the feelings that were spinning in your mind. Best wishes with your future decisions.

12:14 PM  

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